Thursday, July 5, 2012

Friday Fictioneer - Pecos

This is my first attempt to be a Friday Fictioneer (writing 100 words inspired by a new photograph each week), as promulgated by Madison Woods. (My fellow blogging friend told me about this awesome adventure...so be sure to read hers also since she has the system down already.) Without further ado...

The mouse entered the abandoned casita with trepidation befitting her short and rather pitiful existence. She used her single ear to listen for the slightest movement. After two full minutes, she skirted the edge of the wall as fast as her pregnant body could move and darted into the one room that still had part of a ceiling.
Countless desert animals found their way to the casita to give birth each year. But no humans came this way anymore. In the bedroom, not far from where the one-eared mouse settled in to give birth, a silver teething ring on a lilac ribbon lay crumpled in a dusty corner.

There you go! That was surprisingly satisfying. Thank you, Madison Woods!

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18 comments:

logo-ligi GH said...

Wouldn't have known it was your first attempt if you hadn't said it.
Great read.

Welcome to the Fictioneers!

http://logo-ligi.com/2012/07/06/healing/

Anonymous said...

Absolutely beautiful! I will follow your blog and hope you will follow mine. I have two entries on the 100 word challenge. brenda lewis/beebeesword.

JennInAustin said...

Thank you for the cheers! I'm open to all input but I must say it made my heart beat in a happy way to read you kind words after my first attempt. Whew. What a great project.

writersclubkl said...

This is a great scene u crafted. I enjoyed reading it. Well done!

http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/friday-fictioneers-lone-rubble/

billgncs said...

Nicely done, the human ruin, still is shelter for life and hope.

enjoyed it.

erinleary said...

Nicely done! I like the image of the mouse carefully finding her spot; the juxtaposition of the teething ring was a great contrast to what had been.

Mine is #15 on the Link List – here for others: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/07/05/flash-friday-fiction-11/

Kaitlin Branch said...

Brilliant! Love the tie to the human realm using a lowly mouse. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/07/06/friday-fictioneers-10/

Brian Furches said...

cyThis is a terrific first post! I love the notion of these animals being drawn to this place as a place of birth.

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Linda PH said...

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers and what a beautifully crafted piece that was - two small tales which complimented each other really well.

I'm on the list but for those who happen across, my offering is also here: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/07/06/reality-brought-forth/

Douglas MacIlroy said...

Dear Jennifer,

Welcome to the party, pal.

I enjoyed your beautiful descriptions as you showed us the rich history of the house through the eyes of the one eared mouse. Looking forward to reading many more of your offerings on successive Fridays.

Aloha,

Doug

http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/nurture-or-nature/

JKBradley said...

Well done. Keep coming back! I liked the imagery, the perspective of this little one-eared mouse, all of it.

Thanks for sharing.

http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/flash-fiction-friday-lovers-embrace/

Kathy said...

YAY! So glad you joined in. The entire piece is so clearly narrated, but you totally got me with that last line. I love how it just hangs, letting the implications of what had been sink in.

Ilyan Kei Lavanway said...

I like the one-eared mouse. Cute story,and well written. Your words evoked the loneliness of the forgotten casita. Forgotten by humans, that is.

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Harvey Taylor said...

Great first attempt. I especially liked the last line 'a silver teething ring on a lilac ribbon lay crumpled in a dusty corner', because it allowed me to imagine what had gone before. So even though I was not especially interested in the mouse I was left thinking about how all our lives become debris in the lives of other beings that follow.

elmowrites said...

Hi Jenn! Welcome to the fictioneers and thanks for your comment on mine. I loved your description here - so much life in this abandoned house, and so much personality in your heroine. I look forward to reading more from you in the future.

Jess Schira said...

Are you sure that you've never done this before? Your stories quite good. I love the fact that you took a completely different point of view and made it work. I also like the imagery of the forgotten teething ring, i wonder what happened to the previous owner.

Megan Willome said...

I sense the start of a children's picture book!

Atiya Townes said...

Really that was your first attempt? That was great. Welcome to the Fictioneers. I'm here: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/07/friday-fictioneers-hide-out.html